Monday, December 28, 2009

Lovelorn lunatic ...

Remember that day ,
i cried for the bad ,
and laughed at the good,
do you still remember...

As the snaps pass you by,
Spare me a thought,
spare yourself a calm moment,
don't let them pass so easy by...

all matter gray went pale that day,
time did not permit me the chance,
waited for long ,
only to see it die...

feelings veiled beyond my favorite eyes,
failed to thwart the demon,
footsteps of  a merry Christmas,
already running late...

4 comments:

Shubhashish Bhowmik said...

Title of the poem is really good.
I m not a poet not even have that "nerve"
Only suggestion,a poet only words as an instrument, so try to play with it. like "As the snaps pass you by" can become "As the snaps departs".
"spare yourself a calm moment" can be "spare a trice". "don't let them pass so easy by..." can be "don't let them to fade away..."

Som said...

Hmm ... nice suggestions to say the least...
Although as far as the presentation has been tried is based on (at least this one),is based on a imagery of a vehicle of experiences passing a stationary person, which is why i chose the "pass by" part of it...

Hell yeah!
There are so many ways of expressing a thought ... thats what i love about writing...


And well the only reason for choosing a word like "moment" was the reason its so often used...
i had pitched the writing on moments so i chose to keep it simple.
And well "trice" sounds like Keats ,Shelley ,Byron and hell all of them died young!!! :)

And the third one was just that i couldnt resist myslef from writing the "easy" word. i was almost bribed into writing that word...

Jokes apart...
But again hell of of a suggestion.

Thanks and cheers!!!!!!!!
Hope i will get better in no time at all...

Shubhashish Bhowmik said...

hmm you made me to say that Keep It Small Simple always win :) !!!

Som said...

OOps! i must have had a brain fart ...
i didn't get that?